My first concept has changed a lot between what I have now and what I started with. My first concept was vaguely about a guy murdering another guy because he slept with his wife. My story is now about a serial killer who kills racist and sexist men. I wanted to do something a little more original than my first concept, so I decided to have the serial killer a girl, and have her kill off people who are not stereotypically targeted by serial killers. I am not really satisfied with my story right now. I do not like the wording I use throughout the story during the narration, and I feel like my dialogue between my two main characters is lacking. I think that the dialogue does not captivate Gary’s fear of being murdered. I also think that the dialogue does not captivate Roselina’s disgust and willingness to murder Gary. I am happy with the symbolism I put on the story. Every time Roslina is present in the story, there is purple within the setting. I am also happy with all of Gary’s other dialogue. I think I captured Gary well as a character in the dialogue that is not spoken with Roselina. I also liked my introduction of Roselina when she kills Joseph Malone.
I believe that the reading we have done in class has not affected my story very much, but I do believe that my independent reading, as well as other works I have read, have greatly affected how my story was written. My writing style closely mimics that of Cassandra Clare, the author of the Shadowhunters series. I read that series three years ago after watching the show, which I thought was pretty good. Although I was severely disappointed with the books, I read all six of them, and I do think that the author has pretty good diction, although the plot was bad.
In the book that I am reading, each chapter focuses on one person at a time and describes an event they are involved in that reveals them as a character. For example, this chapter focuses on Jon Snow. During this chapter, Jon Snow, the bastard son of Lord Ned Stark, is not permitted to sit with his brothers, sisters, and father during an event to honor the king. He is grateful in this instance to be a bastard because he is able to drink as much as he wants, although he often is not grateful of his illegitimate birth. After having a few too many drinks, he is then met by his Uncle who serves the Knight Watch at the wall. His uncle describes being a part of the Knight’s Watch, and Jon begs him to become a part of it. His uncle tells him that he is too young to make such a big decision and that the conditions of the Knight Watch are no place for a boy. His uncle later makes a joke to Jon about fathering a few bastards of his own, and Jon becomes extremely angry at this statement This reveals to the reader that even though Jon Snow tries his best to act as if being a bastard does not bother him, it is something that constantly troubles him.
I could use this sort of style to reveal my characters in the exposition of my short story instead of simply giving them a brief introduction. This style of character development will help my short story become more advanced and interesting to read instead of being a basic and simplistic story. It fits into developing my story because it will help me dive into the phycology of the antagonist, who is a serial killer. Since getting into the mind of someone so detached from reality is difficult to understand, it will help to show her acting in response to a situation. It will also help with the protagonist, who is a white supremacist. He also has difficult phycology to understand, and showing him in a situation where he acts on these behaviors might help the reader understand why he is the way he is.
The setting in this chapter is mostly a crypt under the castle that serves as a cemetery. All former Starks are buried under here and their graves are marked with stone statues of themselves, and the lords with iron swords. Ned Stark and King Robert, who are brothers, go down to this graveyard of sorts together to mourn their sister whom Robert had been in love with. The setting of the dead’s gravestones is used to darken the mood of the chapter. The king decides to give Ned the opportunity to be the Hand of the King. This position would give Ned all the power of the king without the title, and he would be left to run the kingdom while Robert carries out his selfish lifestyle. During this, Ned attempts to refuse to which Robert tells him he must get out of the cold North and come to the South with him to experience the sun. Ned feels that he belong in the North and does not wish to join him. He then feels as if all the statues of the former Starks are looking upon this arrangement disappointedly. He can feel their gaze looking upon their descendants and what a terrible position Robert has put his brother in.
The setting of the chapter also reveals Lord Ned Stark and King Robert had a sister and brother who had died nine years ago in a war against the self-proclaimed King of the Iron Land. We learn that the King had once been an in shape warrior to be feared, and he is now an overweight self-indulgent king. Both Robert and Ned had been in love with Lyanna, their sister, and Robert was supposed to marry her before she had been killed by Rhaegar when she was sixteen. Robert had then gone into battle and killed him to avenge his sister. Robert said that one thousand death would not be suitable for his crime against Lyanna. Robert also is saddened by Lyanna being in the dark cold crypt with the other Starks. He wants her to have been buried on top of a hill with a fruit tree growing over her. These comments made by Robert show that he is still greatly upset by the death of Lyanna and that he may never stop grieving her. He also wants to join together his son and Ned’s daughter to replicate what was supposed to have been between him and Lyanna.